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Some people believe that if people are allowed to work after the age of 60, it would cause problems for younger. Do you agree or disagree? I

#people #work #age
I totally agree that
this
 might be a big problem for the younger ones,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would explain with two different reasons.
First
 of all some older people would allow their culture blind them from realising that there is so much that they can learn from the younger ones, in the sense that a young person might have discovered a better way of doing things which might make work faster and easier, but they might refuse to buy
in
Suggestion
into
 the idea because they feel
one
 is still young and that they know more than you do as the younger
one
,
hence
 making the work more difficult.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
,
the older
Suggestion
the old
 ones
as a result
 of aging, they might find it difficult to carry out some task efficiently, there is
tendency
Suggestion
a tendency
 of sluggishness, and ability to forget things easily, which might be a problem for the younger
one
 working with him.
In addition
, it could
also
 be a strain on the younger
one
 as he would have loads of work on him due to the fact that the older
one
 couldn't complete their task.

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