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Some people think public library is necessary, however, others believe that the public library is useless. What is your opinion and provide with some relevant examples.

#people #library
Some experts opine that it is
an
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worthless to use the public library
while
,
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 others support
that is
 the most important.
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agrees
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 the benefits of an information centre because it's a place for socialising and reading the
paper based
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publication
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publications
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. In
this
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details
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. One merit of
book
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 room is that it is a place for
a
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socialising. It is because, not only borrowing the
books
'
individual
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individuals
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 can make new friends and become socially active, rather than sitting at home alone and reading online materials.
Furthermore
,
now a days
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 most libraries
provided
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 group activity classes for senior residents like walking with
group
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 in
garden
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, arts etc.
For example
, a recent study showed that the elderly participating in
an social activities
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 tend to have an active mind and less
chances
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 of suffering from mental illness. Some people prefer to read paper
books
 or newspapers for free, because,
latest
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 novels are expensive to buy and an individual cannot afford its cost price,
therefore
, it is the best place to hire their choice of reading. Not only those, if you don't like any specific essay that
borrowed
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, anyone can exchange anytime, so
this
another
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 reason that textbook room is crucial.
For instance
, people
saved
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 a huge amount
on
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 money on
books
,
according to
 a survey held among 100 people.
Hence
, not only for reading materials, human being can save their fund and spend
in
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 some other activities as per their choice. In conclusion, a library plays a vital role in the community,
therefore
, societies need to appreciate the importance of the textbook room of their community and
be
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cooperate in maintaining and saving traditional
method
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 of reading and learning
books
.
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task response
The essay does not fully address the task; both sides of the argument should be presented with a clear opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are not clearly present, and the essay lacks a logical structure.

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