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Some people think public library is necessary, however, others believe that the public library is useless. What is your opinion and provide with some relevant examples.

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Some experts opine that it is
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worthless to use the public library
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,
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 others support
that is
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 the most important.
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agrees
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 the benefits of an information centre because it's a place for socialising and reading the
paper based
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publication
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. In
this
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details
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. One merit of
book
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a book
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 room is that it is a place for
a
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socialising. It is because, not only borrowing the
books
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individual
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individuals
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 can make new friends and become socially active, rather than sitting at home alone and reading online materials.
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,
now a days
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 most libraries
provided
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 group activity classes for senior residents like walking with
group
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 in
garden
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, arts etc.
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, a recent study showed that the elderly participating in
an social activities
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 tend to have an active mind and less
chances
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 of suffering from mental illness. Some people prefer to read paper
books
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 or newspapers for free, because,
latest
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 novels are expensive to buy and an individual cannot afford its cost price,
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, it is the best place to hire their choice of reading. Not only those, if you don't like any specific essay that
borrowed
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, anyone can exchange anytime, so
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another
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 reason that textbook room is crucial.
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, people
saved
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 a huge amount
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 money on
books
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,
according to
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 a survey held among 100 people.
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, not only for reading materials, human being can save their fund and spend
in
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 some other activities as per their choice. In conclusion, a library plays a vital role in the community,
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, societies need to appreciate the importance of the textbook room of their community and
be
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cooperate in maintaining and saving traditional
method
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 of reading and learning
books
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task response
The essay does not fully address the task; both sides of the argument should be presented with a clear opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are not clearly present, and the essay lacks a logical structure.
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