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The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011
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the percentage of students who passed their exams of high school by conditional and gender in the session 2010-2011. The data has been calibrated in
percent
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. At the first glance, it is lucid that the rate of
boys
 was 34.6% and the bonus of
girls
 was 36.7% in physics exposed. But, in
chemistry
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 the proportion of
girls
 was more than
the
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boys
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 which
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 calculated as 30.2% of
girls
 and 14.1% of
boys
.
Moreover
, in history,
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subject conditional
 the ratio of both
girls
 and
boys
were
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 almost
same
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 and measured
as
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 25.6% and 22.9%, respectively. Now,
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 of
boys
were
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 more than
girls
 in geography, which was recorded as 30.4% of
boys
 and 20.1% of
girls
. Probing
further
,
it is clear that
 there was
a
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little difference in the exposed foreign language and mathematics of
boys
 and
girls
. The rate of
boys
 in both subjects was 46.8% and 48.4% and the proportion of
girls
 was 47.4% and 49.2% approximately.
However
, in the likely computer
science
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 the ratio of
girls
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 as 56.3% as the
percent
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 of
boys
 is recorded as 42.1%.
Overall
, it is vividly seen that the
girls
 perform better in all
subject
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 except one subject.
However
, the
boys
 take a lead only in geography subject.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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