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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century and trying to preserve these animals is a waste of resources. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the wild animals are not seen in
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 century and few feel that saving them is a waste of funds and supplies.
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 essay disagrees that preserving
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wildlifelife
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wildlife life
 is a waste of the current world and I support that
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wildlifelife
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wildlife life
 should be taken cared.
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,
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 essay will discuss tourism benefits of wild animals and
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, all the living beings have equal rights to live on the
earth
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. In my opinion, tourism is the leading source of a country's economy so that, by preserving wild animals countries can attract foreigners. In some countries, there will be fewer animals which can be only seen in that place. In order that, those rare animals should be saved and cared to increase the tourism.
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, kangaroos and koalas only see in Australian forest where as, we can't see them in the rest of the world. So, they must protected so that they will be in existence.
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,
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earth
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the earth
 is not only belongs to humans, every living species have equal rights to survive on the
earth
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. Before human race evolved on the
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earth there
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earth, there
 is
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wildlifelife
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wildlife life
. So, we don't have any rights to kill them and stay by ourselves.
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, dinosaurs are the
first
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 living being on
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earth
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 before humans, which proves that everything on the
earth
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 is important. In conclusion,
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 essay opposes that
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wildlifelife
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wildlife life
 should not be preserved in the 21st century and I recommend every country's government should take care of wild rare animals in their country to grow the economy and supports
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wildlifelife
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wildlife life
 rights.

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