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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people claim that high
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service
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, which would be provided by students for free. While the positive impacts are obvious of
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 programmes, there are people, including myself, who believe that
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service
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 is something students should choose to do and not be forced upon. In
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 students’
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 to communities is a great idea,
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 should not be compulsory. To start with, introducing high
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 students to society
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 has a beneficial effect on both sides, communities and students themselves. We see many of communities struggle due to having not enough funding and,
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, encountering many problems,
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 as charities running low and our elderly not being taken care of properly. Unpaid
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 of high
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 students would not only help to fix
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 would provide pupils with a great way of understanding how to work, is part of the society and help at the same time.
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, I believe that high schools should include
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 duty programmes as optional for students to choose and as
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 volunteering activity.
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, arrange an exciting trip somewhere nice. Students would look differently at something they can actually choose from rather than being forced to do and would be a lot more motivated. To conclude, I strongly believe that high schools should promote their students to take on unpaid
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 and
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 award them for doing so.
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, we would see remarkable and positive impacts to many of the communities.
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