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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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It is becoming increasingly common for families to send their elderly relatives to nursing homes, rather than taking
care
 of them at home.
This
 essay will highlight some of the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 change. Looking
firstly
 at the positives, one significant advantage of sending elders in nursing homes is that they are better equipped to cater to the needs of the elderly than family homes.
For example
, most nursing homes do not usually have stairs, and for those that do, elevators need to be installed.
This
 can prevent problems,
such
 as knee pain that tend to appear in geriatrics from complicating. Not only
this
, but the staff of
care
 homes is professionally trained to handle the demands of the old aged. It is rare for members of a family to possess the skills.
However
, sending the elderly to
care
 homes can
also
 present some disadvantages, the most obvious of which is the lack of loved ones around.
Although
 it is possible for friends and family members to visit nursing home residents, these visits are infrequent and can loneliness is often the consequence. Making matters worse, it is shown that loneliness often results in depression and weakening of the immune system.
Furthermore
,
care
 home residents are often surrounded by illness.
Such
 an environment is likely to curtail happiness and trigger severe depression. To conclude, despite the benefits of trained staff and well-equipped facilities provided by nursing homes, the drawbacks of loneliness and its concomitant depression should
also
 be taken into consideration.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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