Children’s education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays

Nevertheless

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, subsidies from the government to young

adults’

Suggestion

adult

education do offer several benefits.

First

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, in order to strengthen national

futural

like the sounds of frogs and crows

guttural

laborforce

Suggestion

, remission school fees is necessary.

For example

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, by reducing

tutions

(psychology) a state of mental or emotional strain or suspense

tensions

, many pupils from low-income families are able to approach a decent syllabus and become

brainworkers

Suggestion

with handsome salaries rather than manual jobs in the future, which tends to ease unemployment rate and increase the quantity of domestic qualified employees.

Second

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, if educational costs become more affordable due to the authorities’ support, it will enhance social security.

This

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means more and more children have opportunities to learn not only specialized

knowledge but

Accept comma addition

knowledge, but

also

Linking Words

social morality and legal order, which results to raise people’s

aweness

having knowledge of

awareness

about conforming to the laws

and and

in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go

and

decline the number of would-be

deliquents

guilty of a misdeed

delinquents

In conclusion,

although

Linking Words

this

Linking Words

trend is not without the drawbacks, the benefits will justify these. By considering all the pros and

coins

an argument opposed to a proposal

cons

, each

goverments

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

governments

will make the best

desicions

the act of making up your mind about something

decisions

for themselves.

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Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

158 words

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