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Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter:say in general what you like about shopping in your area, say what is wrong with the facilities, suggest how they can be improved

#newspaper #area #facilities
I am writing
this
 letter to express my opinion on the decreasing eminence of
Greater
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 Kailash M block market. Substantially, International shopping brands and stupendous restaurants make me visit the market frequently and
also
 popular among
the
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international tourists. There are,
however
, in my
opinion
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 has areas of improvements which I think should be put. Right.
Firstly
, limited parking space, due to the
increase
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 number of vehicle parking space has become
amajor
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a major
 challenge
especially
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 on weekend. Regrettably, the cleanliness and hygiene of public convenience have been disappointingly deleterious. As I am aware that your newspaper is widely read and if you run a poll you will get the real feedback.
Also
, I would like to share my suggestions for
the
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improvement,
such
 as the authorities should construct multilevel parking which will increase the vehicle parking capacity.
Finally
,
a
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 number of public convenience staff should be increased to maintain hygiene & cleanliness along with shift roster and should be strictly supervised. I will appreciate
if
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 you publish an editorial and refining
shopping
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the shopping
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 experience. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Bhavna Malik
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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