The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by the age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by the age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
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The chart examines the levels of donation contributions by British
people
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of different ages in two different years - 1990 and 2010.
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, a greater percentage of British
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gave money to charity in 1990 than in 2010 except for the
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who were over 50 years old. It is worth noticing that, elder
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donated more
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charity than their younger counterparts. In 1990, 42% of the 36-50
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in Britain made charitable donations, and
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figure is the highest on the chart. The 18-25s contributed the least at only 17%. By 2010, these figures had fallen significantly to 35% and 7% respectively. The level of donations from the 26-35
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experienced a decrease in 2010 from 31% to 24%.
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donations up to the age of 50 declined across the two years, they rose among the 51-65
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from 35% to nearly 40%, which was the highest percentage for 2010. The figure for the over 65s was lower than
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, at 35% but it was still a little higher than the 1990's figure of 32%.
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