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Demand of food is increasing worldwide.What is cause of this?What measures can international community take to meet the demand?

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There is
constant
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a constant increase
the constant increase
increase
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 in the demand of
food
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 worldwide. Increasing population is the major cause and
this
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 will be discussed in the essay.
This
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 essay will
also
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 discuss, use of high breed seeds and encouraging urban
garden
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 as a viable
measures
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measure
 which can be taken by
internationally community
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the internationally community
 to meet the demands of
food
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.
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with
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to
increase
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 in population is the reason for
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increase
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the increase
 in
food
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 demands. Population on earth has been increased in many folds since
nineteenth century
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the nineteenth century
,
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,
In addition to it, due to medical facilities
,
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,
death rate
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the death rate
 has reduced and life expectancy has been increased.
As a result
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 more people on
planet
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the planet
 ask for more
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food
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food, hence
hence
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 creating a run to meet the demands.
Measure
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A measure
 which can be taken by international communities is
firstly
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, Use of high breed seeds. It is well known fact that high breed seeds are better than normal seed because they are genetically created and there are less chances of bad saplings to come out of them and
consequently
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 less loss of crop in comparison to use of normal seed
hence
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 at every sowing
such
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 seeds can help in fulfilling the need of supply Another way is encouraging urban gardens. Urban
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garden
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gardening
 is a concept in which some vegetables are grown in balconies or yards
of
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in
 the urban area. If done appropriately it can produce
decent amount
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a decent amount
 of vegetables every season. Though Urban
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garden
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gardening
 is not the ultimate option but it can help to
grater
greater in size or importance or degree
greater
 extent for vegetables supplies. In conclusion, demand of
food
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 has
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increase
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increased
 world wide
.
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.
Increase
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 in population is to blame for it. Use of genetic modified seeds and encouraging urban
garden
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 are the measure which international community can take up and is recommended.

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