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he pie charts and table give information about the total value and source of fish imported to the United States between 1988 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

he pie charts and table give information about the total value and source of fish imported to the United States between 1988 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 pie chart shows
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information about the
countries
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 (
Canada
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, China and others) from where
fish
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 is imported to the US
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, the table illustrates the total
value
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 of imported
fish
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 from the year 1988 to 2000. Units are measured in billions of dollars.
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, the
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 of imports rose by
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double over the span of years. At the same time,
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the most prominent supplier of imported
fish
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 started to decline and other
countries
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 became the main source. Regarding the table, the total
value
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 of important
fish
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 was $6.57 billion in the year 1988. These figures started to change over the course of the year with the
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 soaring to $10.72 billion in 2000. In
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term of the source of
fish
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 imported to the US,
Canada
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 supplied the majority of the supplier in 1988(60%)
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 China and other
countries
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 provided only 13% and 27% respectively. But by 1992, other
countries
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 replaced
Canada
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 as the main supplier with 46% and continued to be one with 42% in 2000. China’s supply in 1992 was 34% but, that
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 dropped to 28% in 2000. Meanwhile, imports from
Canada
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 fell over the years (20%) but
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witnessed an increase of 30%
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 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, canada, fish, value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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