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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Currently, some countries have a higher
population
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 of young adults compared to their
population
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 of
aged
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aging
 persons.
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 statistic has far reaching effects on the economy of any
country
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 which can be both positive and negative,
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 the positive effects of
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statistics
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statistic
 outweigh the negative effects.
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, a higher percentage of young adults in the
population
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 of a
country
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 will provide an
agile innovative
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agile, innovative
workforce which
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workforce, which
 will
contribute the rapid
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contribute to the rapid
 economic growth of a
country
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. In our world today, technological advancement is important for the
development
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 of any
country
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 and young adults are well educated and versed in
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 sector.
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, In Nigeria, we have experienced an influx of financial technology companies (FINTECHs) which are started and run by young-adults in the
country
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. These FINTECHs have actively contributed to the gross domestic product of the
country
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.
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, an increasing young-adult
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 in any
country
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 will result in the re-allocation of government resources from a
high
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higher
 pension and health care fund used to cater
for
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to
 senior citizens to an increased
budget
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 allocation for
research
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 and
development
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. An increased
research
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 and
development
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budget
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 will result in targeted projects for exponential economic
development
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.
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, the case of the pandemic COVID-19, a higher
research
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 and
development
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budget
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 in any
country
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 can determine the speed at which a vaccine is created.
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, a larger young-adult
population
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 could lead to a dearth of history in a
country
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. The aged
population
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 of a
country
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 is usually possible for transferring societal values and historical lessons to the younger
population
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. In conclusion,
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 essay has highlighted the merits of an increased young adult
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population which
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population, which
 includes an innovative workforce with a higher
research
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 and
development
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budget
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.
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, a dearth of
history
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historical
 consciousness could be a demerit of an increased younger
population
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.
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, I opine that considering the economic growth potential to be gained, the advantages of an increased young adult
population
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 outweighs the disadvantages.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic composition
  • economic dynamism
  • dependency ratio
  • social services
  • pension systems
  • technological adeptness
  • innovative workforce
  • national savings
  • educational demand
  • employment opportunities
  • crime rates
  • economic disparity
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