Many doctors say that people in today's world do not do enough physical exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are there to this problem?

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Lack of exercise might be the direct result of poor sports facilities.
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phoneme the governments must build a wide range of apartments and they do not pay attention to the sports areas.
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, individuals have to work on overtime thanks to the fact that their current salary does not meet their living expenses.
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carelessness shows that they are
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aware of the negative aspect of a sedentary lifestyle and how it can make negative results. There are several solutions to tackle
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issue. The government can impose the rules which companies make gym facilities in the workplace and in
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way employers are encouraged to improve their health condition or they can make some free campaigns for the citizens and in
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way people can save in their expenses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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