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With a growing world population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that using gene technology for
food
 production can help feed a growing number of people in the modern world. While I believe that genetically engineered
food
 is not without risks, I agree that it is a feasible way to provide enough
food
 for the increasing world
population
.
To begin
 with, genetically modified products might carry
risks both
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risks, both
 for people and the environment. Indeed, to be introduced to the market GMOs must undergo a meticulous evaluation to ensure that they do not have any indirect effects on human health.
However
, developing countries, where
population
 is
growing especially
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growing, especially
 fast, might not be willing to spend a lot of time on the research or might not have enough funding for it.
As a result
, genetically engineered
food
 they release onto the market may have indirect health effects
such
 as allergic reactions.
Furthermore
, producing GMOs can lead to introducing engineered genes into
wild
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the wild population, thus
the wild population thus
a wild population thus
wild populations thus
population
thus
 causing the loss of biodiversity in nature.
On the other hand
, using recombinant DNA technology has perceived advantages that make the
food
 more accessible.
Firstly
, genetically engineered
food
 has more nutritional value compared to conventional
food
.
Therefore
, people need to consume less
food
 to stay well-fed and healthy.
Secondly
, genetically modified species can have better resistance against plant diseases or certain climates.
Consequently
, producers have fewer expenses on herbicides and maintenance so the products are cheaper for the consumers, which is extremely important in the case of areas facing the problem of hunger. To summarize,
although
 GM foods can be risky and must be introduced only after rigorous evaluation, since they are cheaper and more nutritious, they can make feeding the growing world
population
 possible.

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