People nowadays are buying wider range of household things (for example television, rice cooker) than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

With the advancement of
technology
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humans have adopted a comfortable way of living over the
last
decade.A huge number of population is purchasing a wide variety of items including the kitchen utensils and
entertainment
devices.In my
view
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view, this
this
is a positive trend in society and a step ahead to
utlilize
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
utilize
utilise
the latest inventions for own comfort. Those who, argument against
this
aspect
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justify their view by saying that these inventions have made humans v idle and less active which
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resultantly
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leads to several adverse effects on health.
Moreover
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people spend of their time in wasting and watching
entertainment
programmes on TV
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Same is the scenario with kitchen items
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for example
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newer devices leads to consumptions of more refined diet and
hence
not
benficial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for health.
Thus these
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Thus, these
latest
gadgteries
appliances collectively
gadgetries
are not giving positive impacts
to
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of
humans in any ways.
However
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the proponents of these views have very strong justification that
advent
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the advent
of new
technology
has contributed positively to human being in every aspect of life particularly in
fields
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the fields
of
entertainment
and
kitchneries
.
For instance
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pressure cooker
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pressure cookers
and other
such
gadgteries
appliances collectively
gadgetries
has revultionised
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have revolutionized
has revolutionized
has revolutionised
the cuisine and cooking skills.
In addition
to that
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in the field of
entertainment
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electronic devices are increasingly popular among people for fun and enjoyment.
these
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These
ineventions
the creation of something in the mind
inventions
innovations
are not only source of
comfort but
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comfort, but
also
means of generating money through several ways
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so
consequently
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technology
has a role in earning of the population. To conclude
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although
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there are some
drawabacks
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
associated with new
invetions
a creation (a new device or process) resulting from study and experimentation
innovations
inventions
and their
utlization
the act of using
utilization
utilisation
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,
but if we consider their
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
impacts
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,
which outweigh the negative effects, new
technology
has transformed the comforts of human life to ultimate.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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