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children should always follow their parents' advice. To what extend do you agree?

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It is believed that children should always adhere strictly to
advice
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 given by their parents. Personally, I partially agree with
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 view, and will give my reasons below. On the one hand, some parental
advice
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 would guide children towards habits and
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
 which could develop their positive character traits, helping them grow up as good individuals
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in
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 society.
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, most children are taught during childhood to share their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 toys with their friends, to always tell the truth, to say “ Thank you”
,
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 “Sorry”
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 or “Please” to others all the time, to help those who are less advantaged or needy people, and so on.
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 in turn may shape caring, thoughtful, responsible and well-mannered human beings when they reach adulthood. In
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 way, children could benefit greatly from listening to their parents’
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.
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, there are times when heeding parent’s
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 could be detrimental. To illustrate, when it comes to educational or career choices, it may be children who have the potential to make better decisions than anyone else.
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 is because many parents often wish their sons and daughters to follow in their footsteps, they tend to suggest that their children should choose a career path about which they may be not really passionate. For
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 reason, it is advisable that children should follow their heart and choose what is right for them. Obviously, it could be a bad idea to take parents’
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 in
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 cases. In conclusion, while obeying parents could be advantageous to
children’s personality development
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the children’s personality development
, I believe that children should consider carefully whether to take their parents’
advice
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 when they have to make important decisions in their lives.
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