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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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It is thought by some people that tourists must pay more than local residents when visiting historical and cultural sites in the
country
.
Although
this
 may seem to boost the
country
's economy, I believe that locals and foreign travellers must pay the same amount of money. Charging a tourist more than a local for entering a historically important site would seem beneficial and lucrative for the host
country
. The residents of that
country
 a
lready contribute
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already contributes
to maintaining that site by paying their taxes and it seems plausible that tourists pay a higher f
ee but
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fee, but
it will prove to be disadvantageous as it will not attract too many tourists in the long run. Tourists being charged a much higher entrance fee for attractions around the
country
 would make them feel discriminated.
Moreover
, they already contribute quite a
lot
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a lot
by spending o
n accommodation,
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on, accommodation
 food, travelling within the
country
 and on souvenirs. They are
also
 charged travel tax.
Therefore
, charging them a high price for entry tickets would be unfair. When tourists are treated equally in terms of payment
such
 as of the locals, they would promote more tourism by spreading good reviews of the
country
 they visited t
o
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with
their friends and family.
This
 would make that
country
 more welcoming for future tourists. In conclusion, the host
country
 would gain more benefit by keeping the prices for entry into historical and cultural sites equal amongst foreigners and locals rather than increasing it.

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