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Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this Writing Part 1 task. The chart below gives information about how people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Use the information and language from this lesson to answer this Writing Part 1 task. The chart below gives information about how people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provided information about the percentage of people aged 25-34
either
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who either
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own
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owned
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 or
rent
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rented
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 a house in the UK between 2004 and 2014.
Overall
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,
home owners
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homeowners
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ecperienced
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experienced
experience
an
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a
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 downward trend
while
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 renters showed an upward
tren
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trend
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through
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throughout
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 the period.
Although
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 renters
initially
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 had a lower rate, they outraced homeowners
at the end
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 of the period.
Percentage
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The percentage
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 of
home owners
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homeowners
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 was about 58% in 2004, being higher than
renters
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the renters
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 rate by approximately 30%.
Then
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 it went down slightly to about 56% in 2006 and went up to 57% in 2007.
Next
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, the figure showed a
dramatically
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 decrease to almost 52% in the year 2011 and remained virtually unchanged in 2012.
Then
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 it continued to decline steadily to about 36%
at the end
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 of the period. The number of people renting was about 20% in the year 2004 and increased to about 33% in 2005 and remained
consistently
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consistent
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 in 2006.
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, the figure experienced
a
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apply
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significant
a
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apply
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steady growth during the
next
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 5 years, reaching around 41% in 2011. It remained stable in 2012
,
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 and continued to
rocketed
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rocket
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 to 47% in the year 2014,
outraced
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outracing
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 the rate of
home owners
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homeowners
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, next".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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