the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia

the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia
The charts give information about the genres of TV shows that Australian men and women and different age groups watch.
Overall
, it’s obvious that women tend to watch TV more than men, even though they watch
few
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a few
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sport
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shows. In detail, almost 70% of women enjoy watching reality series,
while
only 35% of males tend to watch
it
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them
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. For both charts, the top ratio (70%) went to
the
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apply
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people aged 45+, but
figures
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the figures
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differ greatly. The percentage of people watching reality shows grows steadily from ages 16 to 45 with the lowest number of viewers, at just over 50% of the age group 16-24 and the highest biggest percentage, at 68% of the over-45s.
However
,
game
shows demonstrate completely different figures. The number of
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the show
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show
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shows
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watched by 25- to 44-year-olds is significantly lower than the number watched by 16- to 24-year-olds and those over 45. Just over 50% of 16- to 24-year-olds watch
game
shows, but
this
share is not as high as the share of people aged 45 and over watching
game
shows, at nearly 70%. Only 41% of 35- to 44-year-olds watch
game
shows, and the share of 24- to 34-year-olds is even lower at 38%.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words game with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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  • demographics
  • viewership trends
  • genre
  • comparative analysis
  • distribution
  • notable deviations
  • cultural influences
  • societal factors
  • predictive trends
  • viewing preferences
  • target audience
  • popularity metrics
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