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Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists suh as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artits should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it is believed that governments should sponsor creative artists
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 as painters and musicians. Meanwhile, some people think that other sources should subsidize these artists. But from my point of view, I think that both governments and other related sources should fund them together. There are many talented and intelligent artists but they do not have enough money to invest in their dreams, so they really need assistance from the
government
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. With the support of the
government
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, these artists can pursue their dreams. They can show off their inherent talents and create beautiful and majestic works, which can help them achieve more success. These kinds of art can contribute to the country's tourism and entertainment industry, which will attract more tourists.
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, if the
government
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 cannot support the artists, they still have other sources of funding
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 as companies, wealthy individuals, other art institutions,...
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 the
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 has lots of problems to solve. And I think that private sources will help these artists to be more successful.
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, many musicians perform in public like streets, parks,...
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 some managers from entertainment companies invite them to their companies, they will be trained to be better and
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 will be famous, earn more money. To sum up, receiving donations from private sources has many benefits and artists can get more opportunities to succeed in their jobs. But that does not mean that the state's budget is excess, it is still important for imaginative artists.
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