You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item explain where and when you left it say what action you would like the company to take You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, ol

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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letter to inform you that I misplaced my
purse
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on the
train
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to London
last
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Saturday
and
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I would like to explain where I left it so that the
company
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can please help me retrieve it. I would
also
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like to plead to the
company
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to take some action, so that I
could
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receive my passport safely.
Last
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Saturday, precisely at 3pm, I misplaced
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my
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purse
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on the
train
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from Lincoln to London. I left my
purse
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on the chair
while
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highlighting
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taking
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the
train
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from Lincoln. Its colour is black with a yellow patch at the tip.
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, my
purse
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contains my driver's license, student ID card and passport. I would like the
company
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to retrieve my
pursue
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purse
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as soon as possible because I will be travelling in the next two days and I will need my passport to do
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so.
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In addition
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, I would
also
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like to plead with the
company
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that they should contact the
train
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station in Lincoln or London if they
received
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any pursuit from any
train
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driver or passenger. If the
company
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is able to retrieve my
purse
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, can you send me a message or an email so that I can come and pick it up? Thank you for your consideration and time. Look forward to your positive reply Yours faithfully, Fagbenro Adekunbi

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greeting and closing
The start and end are fine. Keep them.
single idea per paragraph
Try to put one idea in each block. Some parts talk of more than one thing.
complete response
Be clear on the aim. Say item, where you left it, when, and what you want the firm to do in a simple way.
logical structure
Make the plan clear and easy to read. Use short, simple sentences.
suitable writing tone
Use a polite and steady tone. Some parts feel less clear because of word choice.
tone
Polite tone in the opening and close.
content
Date and place are given, which helps search.
content
The request for action is clear.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable item
  • distinctive features
  • left behind
  • compartment
  • last seen
  • retrieved
  • item description
  • identifying information
  • contact
  • lost and found
  • appropriate department
  • expeditious
  • immediate assistance
  • trace
  • recovery
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