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We have been living in the nuelear age now for over half a century. Since the first atomic bombs were developed, nuclear technology has provided governments with the ability to totally destroy the planet. Yet the technology has been put to positive use as an energy source and in certain areas of medicine. To what extent is nuclear technology a danger to life on Earth? What are the benefits and risks associated with its use?

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We live in
a
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an
 era in which nuclear
technology
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 is present over 50 years
,
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,
which gives governments around the globe power to create big havoc on the planet, a much
more large
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larger
 scale destruction than done by
first
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 atomic bombs bombarded on Japan during World war 2.
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,
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,
still advancements in
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technology
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 has been utilized positively by using it as
source
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a source
 of
energy
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 and medicinal areas as well.
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governments all around the world invest hugely in technological improvements
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,
which can be put to
use
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 in either a good or bad way.
Initally
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Initial
Initially
 nuclear research was limited to atomic
weapons but
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weapons, but
 now it is being in areas
such
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 as
energy
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 as well.
Energy
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 is essential for human survival for
day
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the day
 to day activities and we derive
majority
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the majority
 of
energy
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 from
non renewable
that can not be renewed
nonrenewable
 sources
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 as coal and petroleum.So nuclear can be an efficient way to generate
energy
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 as it can produce
very high amount
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a very high amount
 with
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use
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the use
 of even 1 mg of nuclear substance.
Constractingly
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Contrastingly
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,
there are
also
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 certain risks attached with the
use
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 of nuclear
technology
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 as even a slightest of mistake can be fatal
for
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to
life
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.
For instance
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, In 1986 in Russia there was a leakage in
Chernobyl nuclear power plant
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the Chernobyl nuclear power plant
 due to a
blast which
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blast, which
 had enormous impact to
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life
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the life
 of humans, animals and plants not only in that area but several hundred Kilometres around it.Till date
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 Chernobyl plant emits nuclear radiation and according to
specialists it will
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specialists, it will
 continue for several years more.
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, nuclear
technology
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pose
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poses
 a very big risk to
life
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 on Earth if it is not used in a proper way.Even countries around the world have made nuclear weapons
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,
which can eradicate
life
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 from Earth
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,
in case another world war happens
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.
 The effect of atomic bombs on two cities of japan can be felt till date. To concl
u
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,
de,nuclear
technology
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 can be alternative for various non renewable sources on Earth as well as it can be utilized in other fields li
ke medicine
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medicine, but
b
ut negative
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the negative use
use
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 of the
technology
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 can lead mass destruction as well which can definitely finish the existence of
life
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 from Earth
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