Write a letter to your friend who you recently travelled with to a foreign country. Include • Why you enjoyed the trip • What you are doing now • An invitation to visit you now

Dear Tom, How are you? I hope
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letter finds you well. I am writing to thank you and to invite you to my place. A trip to Thailand was full of fun and memorable. I will never forget the moments we have spent together after a long
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It was like the old days. Water games
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as scuba diving; surfing
was
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the most enjoyable
moment
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. Hospitality was great, and
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the seafood
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was awesome. I cherished every single day of my holidays. Now, I
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an opportunity to change my job
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it’s a multi-national company
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I have to move to Pune for training
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to 6 months. I have a got a good chance to explore
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India, culture, and I’ll grab it with
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both hands. It would be a great pleasure to invite you to Pune for my birthday in September. We will go to the nearby tourist places and have great fun there. I am expecting you to be with me at that time. Please try to make it. Warm wishes, Vishal.

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task response
The letter covers all asked parts: the trip, your current work, and the invite. Some parts show good detail, but fix grammar to be clear.
coherence and cohesion
Break into 3 short paragraphs. Put one main idea in each. Start with the trip, then what you do now, then the invite.
grammar
Use simple and correct grammar. For example, 'The trip to Thailand was full of fun and many happy memories.' Also fix punctuation.
content
Good detail about what you did on the trip.
tone
Warm tone and clear invite at the end.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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