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It is often said “when in Rome, do as the Romans do” Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they visit? Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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It is claimed that when you go oversea countries, you should behave as local citizens. I consider that you should follow tradition of a c
ountry wh
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the tradition
ere you go as a tourist and it is difficult to learn
culture
 no having any knowledge of
language
.
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the language
Initially
, there are several reasons why people should acquire information on
culture
 of countries they v
isit.
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the countries
Firstly
, it can cause confusion to ignore local
culture
 when you are in foreign countries since some people might not accept other cultures in their countries. In Iran if tourist,
for example
, used alcohol beverage, it do not be welcome for police and other citizens.
Secondly
, cultures are sign of respect
in a
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signs
ll the countries.
That is
 why it can consider that cultures are of
importan
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culture
ce to follow and accept for everyone.
Finally
, people who will travel other countries should accept and adapt for to prevent strain among local people and to show their respect to the country.
On the other hand
,
language
 is a essential part
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an
of learning
culture
.
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the learning culture
This
 is because,
language
 is beginning step of
culture
. It is considered that
culture
 can learn with the helping of other source ;
ho
wever,
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the other source
other sources
langu
ag
Accept space
;
e is reli
able and
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the language
 the best key in learning tradition of countries.
Language
 can contribute to learn
culture
both co
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to learning
m
municating w
Accept comma addition
culture, both
ith local citizens and sourcing on internet.
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the internet
To sum up, tourist should adapt and accept
culture
 of the c
ountry
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the culture
where they have destination and
language is
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a destination
 only the best way for
culture
.
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a culture
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