Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think the hobbies can help pleasure from
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a difficult situation
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that people will realise their time and that time can help more and more passing with interesting
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worth remembering
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more and more the hobbies passing with playing games or cooking something as well as they take to glad from them and sometimes take relaxation form hobbies.
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, their hobbies,
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gives more pleasure moods to them.
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, there are some difficult happens collected with hobbies.
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, some people have their purpose in the life and their hobbies impact their life.
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, some people live to achieve earning so much money,
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they haven't enough time for family
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hobbies and other things,
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, they don't find certain of hobbies and don't understand it's enjoyment. But, the starting of hobbies
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique challenge
  • personal growth
  • mastery
  • accomplishment
  • demanding
  • thrill of achievement
  • pastimes
  • fostering
  • sense of community
  • mindfulness
  • stress relief
  • mental break
  • daily stressors
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