Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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enjoyable

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, their hobbies,

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, there are some difficult happens collected with hobbies.

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, some people have their purpose in the life and their hobbies impact their life.

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, some people live to achieve earning so much money,

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they haven't enough time for family

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friends

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hobbies and other things,

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