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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to the closure of the shops in cities and townsDo you agree or disagree

#growth #closure #shops #cities #townsdo
Today the online shopping is developing so fast that it
affecting
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will affect
affects
 to the markets and
shops shopping
Accept comma addition
shops, shopping
 statistics negatively and causes closing more shops in the near future. I completely agree with
this
 statement because a significant amount of people in the world
use
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uses
internet
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the internet
 for purchasing necessary things. On the one hand, booking things from
internet
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the internet
 and saving time is growing rapidly. People are passing to the modern and advantageous lifestyle. A good example for
this
 can be AliExpress company that consists online boutiques. Buying things fro online shops
is
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are
 the most safe and reliable, because it provides clients with guaranteed and high quality products that are made by best business organizations, based on their election.
Such
 kind of stores will
advice
give advice to
advise
 people to purchase something inexpensive or for buying two the same products they gift additional one for free and deliver them for ordered locations. If people purchase things at
home
 they spend time and physical energy less.
However
, going to the market for shopping is
also
 important. Shopping in stores is a type of resting and check the product that you are going to obtain. A good example for
this
 can be Korzinka supermarket. While buying needed thing people can have a rest and enjoy buying materials that they want and observing each
products
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product's
 quality which they will purchase.
Such
 kind of stores are filled with all types of products that are separated
for
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in
 sections looking
to
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for
at
 the product and
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 type, and by marketing people can spend their free time by enjoying. If markets and stores will be closed people will become lazy by staying
home
. In conclusion,
home
 shopping is the most advantageous and modern type of shopping that people can have a rest at
home
 rather than going to stores. It is predicted that in the near future there won’t be any necessity for markets and shops

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