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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location
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Waves
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 are used to produce
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electricity in
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model
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Energy
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 can be produced by using an Input Source just as Wind, Water or
Wave
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. Wind
Energy
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 has been widely used since the 1980s and is
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 by the increase in the number of Windmills across the world. Lately, Researchers have shown that a
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Wave-
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energy
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Machine
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 can be three times more effective than a Wind
Energy
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 engine. On the spot, the design of the
wave
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energy
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 The instrument may appear complex, after all the description of its inner workings detailed below will help a Reader understand it better. As the name suggests,
Wave
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Energy
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 device depends on
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Wave
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 as its Input Source. With the
wave
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energy
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machine
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 installed on the seabed, the
wave
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 direction is taken into consideration. As the water levels rise, the chambers located in the
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Wave-
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energy
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machine
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 push the airflow upwards. Through the Air Duct located at the top,
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the air is pushed towards the Turbines,
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 increased airflow pressure causes the Turbines to rotate. The rotating turbines generate electricity, which is
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 passed through the top Chamber to the Output Source. The Location of the
Wave
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Energy
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Machine
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 plays a significant role in the amount of
Energy
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that
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produced by
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. Larger
waves
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 produce a high output,
whereas
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 small
waves
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 produce low Output. It seems obvious, to install
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Wave-
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energy
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 machines in areas where there are large
waves
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. But larger
waves
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 have been too much expensive compared to small
waves
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 An important point to consider, though, is that
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Wave-
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Energy
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Machine
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 Installation in areas with high
waves
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incur
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 high installation costs. So selecting suitable locations for Installation needs a thorough cost-benefit analysis
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To conclude
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, a
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Energy
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Machine
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 Installed at Suitable Locations and designed well can be extremely beneficial in generating high
energy
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waves, energy, wave, wave-energy, machine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 15 times.
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