IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2

you have a facebook friend living in another country and she is curious to learn about a major news item in your country

#facebook #friend #country #news #item
Dear Smith, Hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing
this
 letter in response to your letter in which you
has shown
Suggestion
have shown
 keen interest to know about the most happening news in my country. Now a
days
Suggestion
day
,
Accept space
,
all news channels in our country are focusing on elections since only one week is left for
final result
Suggestion
a final result
the final result
final results
 of votes.Both the parties
:
Accept space
:
Congress and BJP
are relentlessly promoting
Suggestion
relentlessly promote
have relentlessly promoted
 their efforts regarding
development
Suggestion
the development
 of
nation
Suggestion
the nation
a nation
nations
.Opposition parties are suggesting plethora of benefits to
public
Suggestion
the public such
such
 as employment
,
Accept space
,
career
,
Accept space
,
money
,
Accept space
,
essential goods
,
Accept space
,
food
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 to gain more votes of candidates.As politicians are coming to
doorsteps
Suggestion
the doorsteps
 of
general public
Suggestion
the general public
 to give them confidence in making the nation better.
Hence
,
Accept space
,
people are interested in
elections
Suggestion
the elections
 as they can avail the opportunity and make their livelihood better.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
I too always find
my self
reflexive form of "me"
myself
 engaged in
politics news
Accept comma addition
politics, news
 because we are a part of democratic country and have a right to vote to
chose
Suggestion
choose
 our best leader.If
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 give my vote to a right candidate
,
Accept space
,
my nation will
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 accelerate in growth. I look forward to hear from you soon.
Your
s sincerely, Jashanpreet Kaur
Submitted by jashanpreetkaurbhangu on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: