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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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With the modernisation in the technology sector, digital market have been tremendously increased its reputation and demand towards
TV
 set lovers.
Although
, it won't be succeed much in the education sector as some people believe that watching
TV
 set still not a good source of learning tool.
This
 essay will discuss the key points that whys books are still on the top list as a learning material. As we know, gaining an education from books has been regarded as a traditional method of learning. Even now
also
, most of the schools still adopting the same method of teaching. As per the recent survey, it has been proven that children learn more when they go through the paper materials rather than gaining insight of electronic gadgets.
For instance
, it is easy for a person to highlight the main or key points on books or paper as compared to
TV set
Suggestion
TV sets
the TV set
.
On the other hand
, treating box as a learning tool might not be a good way in the education sector, Despite that the electronic gadgets are an excellent source of entertainment. As, in general, we can say that a child can gain the know-how from box if he/she saw a good show.
For instance
, there is an India reality show named Kaun Bnega Crorepati or a Bournvitta: Quiz Contests which anyhow increase the general intelligence of any human being. In the nutshell, according to the present scenario, I agree with the statement that the station cannot replace the station,
although
TV
 set is
also
 a good source of recognition, if utilised in a good sense.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational tool
  • Documentaries
  • Passive consumption
  • Critical thinking
  • Imagination
  • Attention span
  • Literacy skills
  • Screen time
  • Parental guidance
  • Digital materials
  • Interactive learning
  • Multimedia resources
  • Cognitive development
  • Reading comprehension
  • Balanced approach
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