The bar chart below shows the number of employees from the European Union in the United States (1999).

The bar chart below shows the number of employees from the European Union in the United States (1999).
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The bar chart demonstrates the figure of
workers
who are from the European Union in the United States in 1999.
Overall
, we can see that the statistic
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the
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British employees is the highest
rates
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in the European Union.
In contrast
, the sum of stakeholders who came from the French is the lowest
rates
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. From the graph, the British
workers
accounted for nearly 30,000
peoples
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, which is the highest
figures
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in the European Union
while
the total of French stakeholders
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5000
people
, which is the lowest
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at the same time. Meanwhile, employees who come from Germany
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25,000
people
and the number of Italian
workers
is nearly 10,000
people
.
Besides
, the total of employees in other countries is 20,000
people
.
It is clear that
this
figure is higher than the
rates
of Italian and French
workers
.
However
, it is lower than the
rates
of the British and the Germans stakeholders.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, rates, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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