The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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10
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producing and consuming
electricity
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in 2014.
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, it can be clearly seen that China and the US are the two
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that consume the most
electricity
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. And Germany, which has more
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consumption
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than
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production
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. At first glance, China registered for the first position with about 5400
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kWh
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generated and 5322
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kWh
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consumed. The
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place belonged to the United States with
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electricity
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production
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of nearly 4100
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kWh
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and
consumption
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of 1038
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kWh
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. And the
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place was Russia with
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and
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figures of 1057
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kWh
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and 1038
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kWh
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. The
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positions in turn belonged to Japan with 936.2 for
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and 856.7
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for
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.
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was India and Canada accounted for the 5th and 6th position, India generated 871
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kWh
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and used nearly 700
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,
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the country of maple leaves was significantly lower with 618.9
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kWh
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of
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and nearly 500
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of
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. France and Brazil registered for the 7th and 8th, both
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had the figure of
electricity
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generation was around 530
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kWh
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and 460
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used. In the end, the two
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ranked the lowest were Germany and
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of Korea, with
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production
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and
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of Germany
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526
billion
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kWh
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and 582.5
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, respectively. And 485
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kWh
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of generating and 449.5 of using was the figure of Korea.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, electricity, consumption, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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