Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent technological developments. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every technological developments brought benefits to

people

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the people

. As many new high

tech instruments

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tech, instruments

have changed the way that people live many earlier technologies

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had a lot of

impacts

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impact

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with, I should compare some new technologies with older

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For

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example new

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example, new

mobile systems

such

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as android or

ios

have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

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during 8 or 9 years ago have had

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important impacts on the way people communicate to each other

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As inventing mobile had

change

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changed

the world about twenty years

ago but

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ago, but

these new high tech mobiles have

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changed the lives

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A survey conducted on the recent technological developments revealed that many people think their behaviours have changed.

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, Many earlier technological developments

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as inventing refrigerator, Television, Metro have

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had a lot of

impacts

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impact

on the lives of people. To conclude

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cant

can not

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say which technological developments earlier or recent brought more benefits as both of them are important and made the lives of people more simple

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

163 words

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Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent technological developments. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occured? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Today more and more people want things instantly (e.g. goods, services, news) Why is this? Is it positive or negative development?