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Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

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Over a decade, many retired people travelled to different places.
This
 essay will discuss some reasons why
this
 has occurred and examine the consequences of
this
 current trend.
Firsty
Suggestion
Firstly
First
, people desire pleasant changes in their
life
. They were so engrossed in jobs and routine
life
 that they forget to enjoy their
life
. When they retire, all that matters is to live a
life
 which
otherwise
 would not have had been possible during their working days. These people opt to travel different places as they wish a new beginning.
This
 means, to have a new place to live in and the exciting people to communicate. They believe it could rekindle their
life
.
However
, it should not be forgotten the issues people face when they move their residence far away from their hometown. Family break ups could be one of the serious problems.
Childern
Suggestion
Children
 may not agree w their parents’ choice and could decide to stay back in their existing residence for different reasons
such
 as fear of losing old friends, education and job. That means parents will have to make a difficult choice of moving to their desired destination without their children.
Moreover
, language barrier could be an another issue that could make people less socializing.
Also
, other problems could be
crime
Suggestion
criminalized
criminalised
, safety and medical care. In conclusion, many people wish to move out from their hometown as they desire to start fresh,
however
, care must be taken because things may not work as per their plan, and they may encounter many predicaments.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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