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Nowadays, people are spending more time away from their homes because they spend longer in their workplace. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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The new trend of people considering their
work
-life over their families has created a significant concern as unbalanced
work
 and family life has become a prominent reason for a family disruption.
This
 essay intends to discuss some pros and cons of time allocations for family and
work
. The reason for increased hours of working varies from people to people.
Firstly
, people who are employed in labour jobs,
work
 for more than one job or
work
 overtime to pay their bills as the basic wage with a designated amount of time will not help them cure their expenses.
For instance
, people earning $14/hour working 40 hours a week will hardly be able to pay for their bills and their children’s education.
Secondly
, people with great salary jobs are prone to earn more and more money to feed their hunger for buying expensive things
such
 as cars, houses, and jewellery.
Finally
, some people prefer to stay at
work
 for prolonged hours to avoid family issues and maintain their peace of mind.
In contrast
, the hunger for money has become a prominent cause of family disruption as more and more families are getting dismantled because of not getting enough time for healing their relations.
For instance
, a salesperson usually stays out of home for a prolonged period that even the money cannot soar the relations between the person and family.
Although
 the monetary crisis can be avoided by working more hours, if the family would not be there to spend with, it is fruitless. To conclude, increased working hours have their advantages and disadvantages,
however
, the balance between
work
 and family can be more beneficial in the long run.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career progression
  • earning potential
  • enhanced productivity
  • skill sets
  • work-life balance
  • personal well-being
  • negatively impacting
  • increased stress
  • health issues
  • burnout
  • cardiovascular diseases
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