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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#visitors #attractions
In
this
 modern era, hospitality and tourism industry is growing very fast. The tourists from other countries are playing a crucial role in the economy of many countries. Some people opine that the visitors from other countries should pay more to see the cultural and
histyorical
of or relating to the study of history
historical
 places as compare to the local people.
i
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I, also
I also
also
, strongly agree with
this
 statement. The following paragraphs will discuss the two issues and support my opinion. To start with, many
countries
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countries, for
for example
,
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 is gaining a good amount of
money
 from their tourists from other
european
of or relating to or characteristic of Europe or the people of Europe
European
 countries which are far more developed than
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
. Those people have attractions towards the beautiful
cultural
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culture
 and beauty of the places in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
. They are ready to pay any amount for that and they can afford
this
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 there is no problem in taking more
money
 from them.
This
money
 in turn can be used to develop or refurbish the old buildings.
Secondly
, they are holding the
citizenship
Suggestion
citizens
 of other
countries so, they
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countries, so they
 are taking the
previlige
a special advantage or immunity or benefit not enjoyed by all
privilege
privileges
from
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of
 that
country
. They are enjoying the life by visiting other countries. On the other side, the local people should be allowed for free or only a little amount of
money
 to enjoy these places because, what is the benefit for them if they are paying a lot in their countries to see their ancestors' places.
second
Suggestion
Second
 viewpoint is that, they pay very much to study or go to the foreign countries
.
Accept space
.
That is
 why, they should have some rights in their
country
 at least. On the
third
 slot, if they get
this
 shortage,
then
 they will encourage the foreigners and promote their scenario which in turn provide economic growth to the
country
. To sum up, it is clear that, travellers add up to the prudence of any
country
 as well as the local people can do the promotion for that.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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