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Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#convenience #food #foods #methods #preparation
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Some people have predicted that the increasing popularity of
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food
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 could
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 supplant traditional cuisine and traditional methods of
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 preparation. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 view. For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to replace traditional foods with
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 ones.
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,
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 foods
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 definitely bad for humans physically because of
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the great amount
 of sugar, carbohydrate or saturated fat and insufficiency of vitamins or mineral contents.
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, these unhealthy foods would lead to serious health problems,
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instance obesity
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instance, obesity
, diabetes, hypertension or strokes if we consumed regularly. In fact, people who eat pre-packed
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 daily tend to lose control of their weight and get cardiovascular disease easier than those who rarely consumed these foods.
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, there are allergenic ingredients
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 as corn, wheat, rice or oats in each pack of these foods. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I strongly believe that
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 foods can not replace traditional ones because of their adverse impacts on
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the environment
. Most packagings are made from plastic, which is one of the most persistent fuels.
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 will result in the increasing of waste and negatively affect oceans, lands and creatures.
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, there are tons of waste from packagings releasing into our planet annually, floating on the water, polluting the land.
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, traditional foods are crucial aspect of culture and social life. And important celebrations
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 as Christmas, Thanksgiving and Lunar New Year are significant by traditional methods of
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 preparation In conclusion, the replacement of processed foods should be based on demerit, and I believe that it would be impractical to change our eating habits.

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