Employers should give their staff at least four-weeks’ holiday a year to help employees get better at their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
present world, most workers
are interested in vacation and work
-life balance. Some people
may have claimed that companies should give around a month's vacation to their employees. I personally agree with this
suggestion because workers
will be satisfied with their workplace when they receive longer holidays
.
To begin
with, there is a negative effect when employees get short vacations
. I understand that the company will lose profits if workers
are absent for a long time
because no one can replace one's work
completely. However
, I believe that if workers
don't receive long vacations
, then
the efficiency of the workplace will decline. For instance
, most workers
in Korea used to get short-term holidays
, less than 10 days, and this
resulted in people
feeling burned out in their workplace. This
shows that we need enough rest time
to get refreshed during long-term holidays
.
On the other hand
, there are a few positive effects of giving long holidays
to employees for both individuals and company. Firstly
, workers
will be inspired by experiencing various things such
as travelling to other countries or visiting art galleries. For instance
, if workers
experience other countries' cultures by communicating with local people
while
visiting or seeing beautiful exhibitions, this
will likely to
help them to improve novel ideas which they can use at Fix the infinitive
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work
. Thus
, the longer holidays
people
get, the more workers
' abilities are improved. Secondly
, people
can discover their habits
while
having longer vacations
. Most workers
cannot invest their time
in learning habits
after work
. However
, if they have at least a month for holidays
, they have enough time
to attend a cultural centre which helps individuals to discover their habits
. For example
, people
are likely to join a running club or a cooking class in the cultural centre and they will maintain these habits
even after the vacation. As a result
, workers
who enjoy their lives after work
will tend to be engaged in their work
better rather than people
who cannot enjoy their free time
. This
demonstrates that if workers
relieve their stress with long holidays
, then
the efficiency of work
will improve.
In conclusion, even though there are some adverse effects of having long vacations
, long-term holidays
have positive influences on both workers
and companies. I firmly agree with this
statement because if individuals feel refreshed and excited on their vacations
, their work
efficiency will automatically improve.Submitted by kchengii on
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