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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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The
supermarket
 is a place where buyer can come and explore the
commodity
 which is available in the retail.
customer
Suggestion
The customer
Customer
always have
Suggestion
always has
 their preference of their specific cuisine
commodity
. In my experience,
Supermarket
 has to keep all the feed products which are made within the provincial and imports the feed from overseas. The study shows us, any business which is operating within the provincial and outside
the homey
Suggestion
the home
 has to introduce the ample and the variety of the feed
commodity
 in the
supermarket
. The cuisine
commodity
 which is largely manufactured with local producer, has to be in the
supermarket
 to promote them and homey have certain guideline for all business owners. Nowadays, Supermarkets are available in all over
the homey
Suggestion
the home
. The products which are available in the display are variable in their price. The local brands have very low price compare to branded foodstuff products. About the taste, the
commodity
 has far differences in terms of taste, quality, packaging and availability of the
commodity
. Sometimes, the buyer has to face scarcity of the specific
commodity
 in the display.
However
, The
supermarket
 always has an alternate
commodity
 option which can give little satisfaction to the purchaser. The changing behaviour of the shopper given a bracket to
this
supermarket
 to keep any
commodity
 in
store
Suggestion
the store
 because the user can buy anything these days as per their taste, budget, liking, etc. I am concluding by saying
this
 that the
supermarket
 has to keep all kinds of
commodity
 and variety of the
commodity
 which can help the buyer to buy things with their preference.
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