The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, between 2000 and 2010. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph shows information about the amount of money which was earned by three bakeries in London, over a ten-year period between 2000 and 2010.

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, what stands out from

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is that there were considerable upward trends in the

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of both Bernie’s and Robbie’s Bakery,

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the

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of Lovely Loaves saw a considerable fall over the period in question. Another interesting point is that Lovely Loaves was the most popular bakery in 2000

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but in 2010. Robbie’s Bakery earned more money than the others. Looking at the details, as regards Bernie’s Buns,

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started at 20,000

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in 2000,

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there was a fluctuation over the

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three years, at which point it

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off at just under 40.000

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until 2006.

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the figure went up significantly, finishing at around 55.000

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in the first half of the decade,

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rose sharply, reaching approximately 100.000

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in 2008. There was

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a gradual rise to around 105.000 until 2010.

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, the

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of Lovely Loaves went in the opposite direction. Taking fluctuated around 90.000

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until 2004. After that , despite falling sharply to just over 40.000

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in 2008, the figure

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leveled

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off in the

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two years.

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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, between 2000 and 2010. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people claim that it is unfair to have same age limit in works.Do you agree or disagree?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extend do you disagree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed .