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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The debate whether it is a positive or negative development that today people are spending more money on the consumer goods than ever before, has now become a matter of discussion for many. Personally, I believe that the benefits of
this
 trend outweigh the drawbacks. In
this
 essay, I shall critically analyse the topic and outline the both sides of
this
 change. On the one hand, there are some clear profits of
this
 tendency.
Firstly
, nowadays, people are more aware about the personal hygiene
this
 is due to the fact that the companies who manufacture these products, constantly advertise and promote the benefits of
such
 items to the public.
This
 has resulted in both the good and bad news. As,
although
, it has improved the living quality of the people,
however
, it is
also
 the reason for the rapid growth in the prices of the consumer goods.
Secondly
, it has
also
 helped in
increasing the
Accept comma addition
increasing, the
 economy of many countries, as
this
 market growth has opened many gates for the new employment opportunities.
On the other hand
,
this
 movement has
fueled
record in a public office or in a court of law
filed
failed
 a number of problems for the society.
First
, people are now more obsessed with their looks and materialistic possessions than ever.
In addition
, an article published by the Oxford University, revealed that 7 out of 10 people, rate themselves as not attractive enough, due to the bad influence of the cosmetic industry on the people's judgement.
Lastly
, there is ample evidence that
this
 trend is directly responsible for the increased number of the people suffering from social anxiety and depression. In conclusion,
this
 is a topic which raises many questions in the contemporary life. After thorough examination of the subject, and taking the given examples into consideration, I am inclined to say that the positive aspects of
this
 development surpass the negative points.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mass production
  • consumerism
  • economic growth
  • environmental degradation
  • natural resources
  • overconsumption
  • waste management
  • landfill
  • social inequality
  • materialism
  • financial strain
  • mental well-being
  • quality of life
  • job creation
  • productivity
  • pollution
  • deforestation
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