Some people believe zoos are good places for people to learn about animals. Other people believe animals belong in nature and it is wrong to keep them in zoos. What do you think? Explain, giving specific reasons for your choice.

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Recently, due to the pandemic, we must stay at home during the
quarantive
enforced isolation of patients suffering from a contagious disease in order to prevent the spread of disease
quarantine
curative
time. The feeling that most of us have is that boring. We really remember the atmosphere outside. In my opinion, animals
also
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have them same feeling like us when being kept in zoos. In
this
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essay, I will take down some specific reason to point out the reason why it is wrong to keep animals in zoos.
First
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, zoos
is
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are
on the only place for people to learn about animals. Nowadays, we have the Internet, we have many fundamentals to explore the nature, even about the galaxy.
For example
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, children can learn about the tigers through videos on the Internet or from books. Reading books
brings
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bring
many benefits for children, in
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case, they can learn more about the nature, exactly is animals.
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, people have taken
advantages
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advantage
of animals for making money. People visiting the zoo have to pay a fee to see
animals
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the animals
. What I want to say is that, the specific reason for keeping animals in zoos is just for business. They just give some reasons like creating a place for people to learn more about animals or providing a sanctuary for protecting them from being extinct, etc.
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, I think we did have the national park and
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enough.
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, animals
is
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are
the same as human beings. They want to have freedom, they want to enjoy their life outside. These days, we are being kept in our own home. Our feeling is terrible. Some feel depressed, some feel lonely. We all want to get out
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situation, we do not want to be kept, even at our home.
Therefore
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, we should not keep animals in zoos. In conclusion, even zoos have their benefits I do not agree to keep them in zoos.
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