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Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible to what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #countries #food #population #import
Food
 play and crucial role in
this
 world. Most of the people think that they should be self sufficient and
import
 less
food
 from
rest
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the rest
 of the world. I disagree with
this
 statement as there are several
benefit why
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benefits, why
benefits why
import
 is significant
also
 proper
food
 needed to be
import
 ahead too. There are various fundamental reasons,
that
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that's
 why
food
 is
import
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imported
 from the other country.
Firstly
, the most effective reason is that agriculture is sensitive
with
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to
 the climate.In every country, it is not essential that all
kind
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kinds
 of
food
is produced
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are produced
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, to trigger with
this
 problem, there is only one solution than one
Nation
 integrated
there
of them or themselves
their
 economy with the economy of the other
Nation
. To illustrate, India imports serials, edible oil, petroleum product from the other country because these products are not grown in India due to
climate but
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climate, but
 in India wheat
,
Accept space
,
rice
,
Accept space
,
sugarcane and many more are highly produced
.
Accept space
.
 Apart from
this
, many countries Prioritize industrialisation more than farming.
Although
, agriculture is indispensable for
employment but
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employment, but
 most of the
countries
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country's
 modernization and industrialized their
nation
 for growth and development. These Nations have to
import
food
 from other
Nation
.
Four
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For
 examples, China and European contribute to industries 4560 and 4184 respectively. To conclude, the
import
 is essential for every
Nation
 as not only for
food
 but
also
 for other products. So, to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the needs of every
Nation
, globalisation should be in enhance. The government should reduce the tariff and quantitative restrictions.
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