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Tourism is becoming increasingly important as a source of revenue to many countries, but its disadvantages should not be overlooked. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traveller industry is in great demand in many countries.
Although
 tourism helps the authority to earn a huge amount of money every year, but everyone should be aware about its disadvantages. I agree with the statement to some extent. On the one hand, tourism has a plethora of benefits to countries, travellers and locals.
First
 and the foremost, all the tourists love to explore different countries for their culture and history.
Therefore
, they travel a lot to various sightseer places.
In addition
, it spreads the culture, like clothing, food and music of one location to another.
Hence
, more people are encouraged to visit
such
 places and it could lead to a handsome revenue.
Also
, more earnings mean development and these funds are used to maintain the visitor attractions and
also
 to build more places.
Lastly
, with
this
 expanding industry, there are a large number of job opportunities for locals. Meanwhile,
this
 employment results in overall development of all the countries.
On the other hand
, several drawbacks of tourism should not be ignored.
Similarly
, the
first
 disadvantage is that it has a deleterious effect on the environment. As people through waste materials in their surroundings and due to lack of waste management, it spreads and cause soil pollution.
Moreover
, the establishment of new visitor places causes deforestation, which means felling of trees in forests. One of the crucial drawback is spreading of disease due to transmit of viruses. As visitors act like hotspots of some deadly diseases.
For example
, recently Coronavirus hit all over the world with its deadly effect and its mortality rate was too high. To conclude, in spite of disadvantages the traveller industry has many benefits that progressed the economy of countries, but the government should act to reduce the harmful effects of it in order to serve the humanity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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