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The widespread use of internet has many problems .what do you think are the main problems associated with the use of internet? What solution can you suggest?

#internet
In
this
 contemporary era
,
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,
An
internet
 is ubiquitous and
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 abundant utilization in
individuals
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individuals'
individual
 lives
make
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makes
 things easier along with
create
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creating
 some problems.In
this
 essay I will discuss the demerits and solutions to get
ride
relieve from
rid
 from
this
 problem. An
internet
 is
become
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becoming
boom
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a boom
 for in every
profession
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profession, such
such
 as student, teacher
,
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,
doctor, architecture as well as for business
mans
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men
. It
cause
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causes
 many side effects among people. Primarily
mentally
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mental
 problems like laziness and entire dependency on
internet
. Which make individuals less intelligent and their dependence
create
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creates
 barrier between basic knowledge.
For instance
,
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,
according to
professors most
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professors, most
 of the students solve their regular homework by using
internet
 which
make
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makes
 them less self solving problems.
Moreover
,
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,
excess use of
internet
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the internet
 means more chances of hacked their personal data and the misuse of their information. According to cyber
crime police
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crime, police
 in India more than thousands of
internet
 users loss their personal information and money
by
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from
 online transactions in every year and it is increasing
preptually
with little or no delay
promptly
.
However
, it can be outweighed by some measures
such
 as by prohibition of fake websites with limited use and surfing with secured websites or applications. Overall
,
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,
every
internet
 users crossed from some benefits and
problems but
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problems, but
 problems can be tackled by using some precautions.

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