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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the percentages of people in age 65 and over in three different countries from 1940 to 2040.
Overall
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, the proportion of
Japan
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 was by far the lowest until 2020; meanwhile, three countries observed upward trends in life expectancy over the period surveyed. A similar pattern was reported for Sweden and the USA with a steady rise of roughly 5%,
whereas
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, the figure for
Japan
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 decrease slightly to 3% from 1940 to 1980.
At the end
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 of the 1990s, the proportion of Sweden overtook that of the USA; meanwhile, that of
Japan
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 rose slightly to 5% in 2000. When the period 2000-2010 witnessed a stable trend in the growth of the USA’s
life time
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,
Japan
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 and Sweden grew dramatically
by contrast
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. By the end of 2040,
Japan
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’s proportion will have increased significantly and overtook the others to become the highest among the three countries surveyed.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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