Do you Agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money ? Give reasons for your answer.

Entertainment is significant in life, so famous people

such

as singers, actors,

models

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and models

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benefit from

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field. It is argued that they are paid far too much

money

.In my opinion, I tend to agree that they deserve a high salary for their dedication and effort. First of all, as

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professions,

celebrities

have to give a lot of time and relentless training

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effort in

the hopes of

shinning

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shining

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in the limelight.

For example

, Korean trainees

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spent many years efforting against thousands of

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others

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to reserve a debut.

Secondly

, not everyone has a rich artistic talent that has to go through the process of harsh training ,so that

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they

can compete in a fast-firing work environment.

For instance

, Jin Bts is a person who has

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singing and dancing day and night because of his original background as a model, he needs to cultivate more skills to become an idol.

Therefore

, they absolutely

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be paid a high income for their efforts. Another argument in

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of paying a lot of

money

for the jobs which

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education

decoration

and health of

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. In fact,

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such

as teachers, doctors and engineers

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have a more stable salary than well-known people. Because they do not have retirement pensions

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they get older and the amount of

money

they receive depends on the number of tickets sold each concert and profit from the music product.

While

the

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new

celebrities

just appear and the old ones have to try their best to bring the quality end trendy goods in order to maintain their social position. It is undeniable that famous people are influencers who have power in

media

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community to join them and their fans together to help the

disadvantages

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or donate charitable funds.

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Furthermore

, the spiritual contributions of

celebrities

not only help us to relax but

also

inspire the dynamic. In conclusion, I believe that

celebrities

appropriate be paid far much

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for their dedication.Because every occupation is equal, no job is more noble than

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,as long as they work true.