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Do you Agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money ? Give reasons for your answer.

#celebrities #money
Entertainment is significant in life, so famous people
such
 as singers, actors,
models
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and models
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who
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benefit from
this
 field. It is argued that they are paid far too much
money
 .In my opinion, I tend to agree that they deserve a high salary for their dedication and effort. First of all, as
other
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in other
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 professions,
celebrities
 have to give a lot of time and relentless training
effortin
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effort in
 the hopes of
shinning
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shining
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 in the limelight.
For example
, Korean trainees
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spent many years efforting against thousands of
ones
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others
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 to reserve a debut.
Secondly
, not everyone has a rich artistic talent that has to go through the process of harsh training ,so that
thay
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they
 can compete in a fast-firing work environment.
For instance
, Jin Bts is a person who has
practiced
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 singing and dancing day and night because of his original background as a model, he needs to cultivate more skills to become an idol.
Therefore
, they absolutely
deserve
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 be paid a high income for their efforts. Another argument in
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 of paying a lot of
money
 for the jobs which
helps
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help
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decuation
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education
decoration
 and health of
community
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the community
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. In fact,
Professions
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such
 as teachers, doctors and engineers
who
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have a more stable salary than well-known people. Because they do not have retirement pensions
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they get older and the amount of
money
 they receive depends on the number of tickets sold each concert and profit from the music product.
While
 the
the
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new
celebrities
 just appear and the old ones have to try their best to bring the quality end trendy goods in order to maintain their social position. It is undeniable that famous people are influencers who have power in
media
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 community to join them and their fans together to help the
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 or donate charitable funds.
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Furthermore
, the spiritual contributions of
celebrities
 not only help us to relax but
also
 inspire the dynamic. In conclusion, I believe that
celebrities
 appropriate be paid far much
money
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of money
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 for their dedication.Because every occupation is equal, no job is more noble than
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anyone
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,as long as they work true.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lucrative
  • revenue
  • sponsorships
  • merchandise
  • career longevity
  • market demand
  • economic contribution
  • role models
  • influence
  • entertainment industry
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