Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities other however say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required .dissucs both these views and give your opinion

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A group of people

belives

accept as true; take to be true

believes

that sport's is very beneficial for health

On the

contrary others

Accept comma addition

contrary, others

belives

accept as true; take to be true

believes

believe

that sports is not enough and others should be taken into account

such

nutritions

Suggestion

nutritious

nutrition

diet plan and a clear environment. I personally believe that others measures should be taken into account which is related to environment and cuisine

this

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an analytic or interpretive literary composition

essay

shall elaborate both views how people can benefit by implementing in their routine life by playing game people

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become less tense, rest, or take one's ease

relax

their

body but

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body, but

folks do daily exercise or playing game in certain period will have less chances of obesity and disease make mind thoughts in routine life who don't do exercise at all

for instance

doctors always prescribe to morning walk are suffering for diseases as diabetes and obesity.

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Suggestion

In conclusion, both

at playing sports benefits the mental

strength

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energy, but

and keep people agile engaging in other activities leads improve on the level of concentration and relive stress which is due to hectic schedule in my palace we have part time session class like yoga karate and dance class for these who are interested playing games not only increasing our vigous it helps to make mind thoughts in routine life In conclusion both views are great in improving public energy but I think the combination of sports and other measures can be more effective

Mon Apr 27 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

221 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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