The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
This
report derives from a line graph which illustrates
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60 years of historical fuel
consumption
by Americans with a coming
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projection. As an initial overview, To compare with other fuels, Petrol and Oil
consumption
are always
in
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high by US citizens,
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, Nuclear, solar and hydropower
has
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no chance to double
up
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their uses in the future. Petrol and Oil have begun dominating by
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35
Quadrillion
since 1980.
Moreover
, the projection shows
consumtion
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consumption
will be moving
in
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highest peak
nearly
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of nearly
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50
quadrillion
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quadrillions
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in 2030 as well.
On the other hand
, Coal and natural gas
were
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consumed a slight difference in the beginning 20
quadallion
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quadrillion
and 16
quadrillion
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respectively. But both
consumption
was
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levelled up at the same place in 1985 and
continued
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follow up the same
path way
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till 2015. Future
predictionrepresents
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prediction represents
prediction-represents
that Coal
consumption
will increase
5
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quadrillion
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quadrillions
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more than now and natural gas will remain
same
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as it is. Uses of Nuclear, Solar and Hydropower were very minimal
like
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around 3
quadrillion
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quadrillions
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in 1980. Later 1990, except
hydropower
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for hydropower
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all
shows
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very
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steady upward tendency till 2030. But there has no chance to increase a lot like others fuel resources.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, quadrillion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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