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some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city while other think that bicycle is best discuss both and give your opinion

#people #cars #travel #city #bicycle
IN
,
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,
modern era
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
provide
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provides
 us
differnt
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 types of transport. People
use
 transport for their daily purposes and have
go
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gone
 to the work.
it
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It
argurd
present reasons and arguments
argued
 some like car for travelling
on the other hand
 some like bicycles.
Next
 paragraphs we are
ellobrating
marked by complexity and richness of detail
elaborating
 both.
Firstly
,
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,
bicycle
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the bicycle
 is a free of cost form of transport
furthermore
use
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the use
 of
bicyclein
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the bicycle in
bicycle in
a bicycle in
 routine
isvery
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is very
 helpful to do exercise in
modren
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
 swamped life.
on
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On
 the other
side it
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side, it
 is very
beneficiAL
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
fo
in the direction of
to
for
 reduce traffic and air
pollutoins
undesirable state of the natural environment being contaminated with harmful substances as a consequence of human activities
pollution
.
for
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For
instance in
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instance, in
 2016 all
russisan
of or pertaining to or characteristic of Russia or its people or culture or language
Russian
 workers used cycle in every
friday
the sixth day of the week; the fifth working day
Friday
 for going to work the conclusion is that
a
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an
 immense fall on air
polliutions
undesirable state of the natural environment being contaminated with harmful substances as a consequence of human activities
pollution
 and traffic problems.
coparing
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Compared
Comparing
Coparing
 to other
privious
just preceding something else in time or order
previous
 years.
health
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
Health
 rate of
russian
of or pertaining to or characteristic of Russia or its people or culture or language
Russian
reaction
resin
increse
become bigger or greater in amount
increase
increased
increases
 25% and rating of heats disease falls down
.
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.
on
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On
 the
flipside
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flip side
, some uses cars
for
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to
 go to job or other works.
they
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They
 think
luxious
displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
luxurious
 is
a
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an
amendity
pleasantness resulting from agreeable conditions
amenity
tranfort
move something or somebody around; usually over long distances
transport
transfer
 service.
they
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They
imagid
an iconic mental representation
imaged
 bicycle is only
waste
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a waste
 of time and we cannot travel more distance in
few hours
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a few hours
.
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.
therfore they
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Therefore, they
Therefore they
Therfore they
 prefer car rather than cycle
.
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.
for
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For
instance my
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instance, my
 company is 25 kilometres from my house so by the bicycle to go we feel very tiresome and indolent during work time IN my
opinoin
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
, cycles are the
ecofridenly
 war of
transpotation
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
 rather than
luxious
displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
luxurious
.
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.
it
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It
 comes down the level of various health
disesea
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diseases
disease
 mad keep us fit and
healthy but
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healthy, but
on the other hand
 for far travelling we can
use
 cars
.
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.
the
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The
 conclusion is that people should
use
 cycle in daily purposes
instead
 of cars.

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