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Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do agree or disagree?

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The
ban
 of smoking in public places is happening in many countries. There are advantages and disadvantages of the
ban
 of smoking in public.
Therefore
,
this
 essay will discuss both positives and negatives.
Moreover
,
this
 essay will explain why
this
 essay tends to agree with the
ban
 on smoking in public.
Firstly
, the smoking in public areas makes a pollution problem badly. Many people already know about the bad effects
on
Suggestion
of
 the smoking and they
don’t
 want to smell especially pregnant women. Each year many people die due to the lung cancer. Not only the smoking has effects on a smoker, but it
also
 affects people near a smoker.
Thus
, many governments have amended the law about the smoking in public.
For example
, in Japan, the government
don’t allow
Suggestion
doesn’t allow
 citizens to exhaust in public, but they have special areas for smoking.
As a result
, Japanese people have a good habit to smoke in smoking areas.
However
, there are some people that against to exhaust in smoking areas. Those people refer to the human right, but they
don’t
 care about public people. Some people, who are addicted to smoking, can not stay longer without smoking. They feel that the
ban
 on smoking has bad effects on their routine life. In conclusion,
this
 study agrees that governments should
restriction
Suggestion
restrict
 the smoking in public areas because there are many drawbacks of the smoking. If governments look to a population of people, who are smoking, and people, who
are not smoking
Suggestion
is not smoking
, they will see that there are fewer smokers than people who
don’t
 smoke.
As a result
, That’s the right thing that some governments
ban
 the smoking in public spaces.

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